And The Winners Are…

The winner of the Hawkeye Manuscript Development Prize receives a coveted $2,500 editing package that comprises a structural edit with Lauren Daniels from Brisbane Writers Workshop, followed by a line edit with Carolyn Martinez from Hawkeye Publishing. Carolyn has 20 years experience as a newspaper, magazine and book editor, and Lauren has over 100 published titles to her credit. Carolyn and Lauren co-authored the bestselling writing guide: Winning Short Story Competitions: Essential tools for the serious writer. Both editors are experienced writing competition judges.

In case you missed it, you can read the LONGLIST and SHORTLIST from this year’s Hawkeye Manuscript Development Prize. These linked articles include judges’ comments on the 2022 field of entrants.

The shortlist as selected by Hawkeye’s Carolyn Martinez and Nita Delgado was handed over to a panel comprised of Queensland University of Technology and University of Queensland writing and editing majors: Aidan Demmers and Meesha Whittam, to select third place, second place, and the overall winner. The results were clear.

Third Place

Congratulations to Gabrielle Davis for securing third place for her manuscript: The Road to Freedom.

The Road to Freedom also shortlisted in last year’s Hawkeye Manuscript Development Prize. In 2021, judges provided Gabrielle with feedback that the ending was cluttered, rushed and confused. Gabrielle clearly took on the feedback and worked on her manuscript, with this year’s judges noting clear and strong characters and character growth, a riveting ending, a defined power system that is not overly explained, world-building that is engrossingly scattered throughout action, and well-paced and enthralling rising tension throughout the work. Clearly, The Road to Freedom is a fantasy book we might soon see on the shelves. Congratulations Gabrielle. You’ve placed third in a very strong field, and we wish you all the best in attaining publication for your novel. May your high ranking in the Hawkeye Prize assist in gaining your manuscript the interest your work deserves.

Second Place

Second place honours goes to Bryn Smith’s science fiction manuscript Magnus Nights: Leviathan. Congratulations Bryn on this significant achievement. Judges noted that your manuscript has a lead character who’s put into positions that up the stakes in extremely interesting ways, characters are drawn with depth and placed into positions to explore that depth, the book’s pacing is superb and the action scenes are extremely well crafted, the prose contains original phrasing that is lovely to read, the comedy works well, and the underlying themes of trauma and mental health are treated with respect but not overladen. Rising tension is one of the manuscripts greatest strengths. Congratulations Bryn Smith on your well-deserved second place.


And the biggest announcement, the overall winner of the 2022 Hawkeye Manuscript Development Prize is Mary Greenwood for her young adult fantasy manuscript, Moontide. Congratulations Mary – Moontide was a clear and unanimous winner. Pacing, characterisation, world building, and rising tension all got top marks from judges. Judges were impressed by the exquisite prose and interestingly original descriptions, fabulous mystical atmosphere, and the strong, distinctive characters who all had different goals, motivations and personalities which created riveting storylines. The ending was noted as satisfying, and living up to the quality expectation of the preceding chapters. Congratulations Mary – you’re in for a career-changing experience to work further on your manuscript with Carolyn Martinez and Lauren Daniels.

Hawkeye prize winners
L to R: Gabrielle Davis, Bryn Smith and Mary Greenwood.

Working With Editors

It is a truism of working with a professional editor that their work will lift you to the next level. Hand an editor a manuscript in a poor condition, they’ll be able to lift your manuscript to an acceptable standard. Hand them a good manuscript, and they’ll lift your work to very good. But hand them an excellent manuscript and you free up the editor’s mind and time to work on the game-changing nuances like motif, high level structure and characterisation, perfecting beginnings and endings. That’s the juicy stuff, and what really excites an editor. Carolyn and Lauren are looking forward to getting their hands on Moontide and seeing just how far they can go with Mary Greenwood and her tremendous story.


As outlined in previous articles published with the Longlist and Shortlist, the quality of entrants in this year’s prize has meant that all manuscripts that made the Longlist are currently with Hawkeye Publishing’s Submissions Review Panel for consideration as to whether Hawkeye would like to progress further with any author and their manuscript. This process takes time, but any that the Panel wish to progress further will be contacted in due course.

Thank you to all entrants in this year’s competition. You all showed promising ability and made judging this year’s prize an absolute pleasure. The range of topics and stylistic approaches to manuscripts was surprising and wonderful to judge. We will disseminate judges’ comments to all entrants over the coming 6-8 weeks.

Once again, congratulations to this year’s winner, second place-getter, third place-getter, and those shortlisted and longlisted. You should all be celebrating your significant achievement in a strong field.

Thank You to This Year’s Judges

Thank you also to this year’s judges: Carolyn Martinez, Nita Delgado, Aidan Demmers and Meesha Whittam. Judging is a significant time commitment that comes with a responsibility of diligence to all entrants. Hawkeye also thanks our sponsor Brisbane Writers Workshop, where you can find the best writing workshops around.

Interested in sponsoring next year?

If your organisation is interested in sponsoring this important, not-for-profit, prize that provides an entry avenue to new and emerging talent, please contact us – we have opportunities for next year.

Short Story Competition

Entries for Hawkeye’s annual short story competition close on 1st August 2022. This year’s theme is “water under the bridge”. Read more about the Sydney Hammond Memorial Short Story Competition.

16 comments to “And The Winners Are…”

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  1. Robyn - April 3, 2022 Reply

    Congratulations Mary and all other place getters, shortlisters and longlisters. Can’t wait to read your work.

    • Carolyn Martinez - April 4, 2022 Reply

      Hi Robyn, Thank you for your lovely words of encouragement to all our entrants. They really do deserve it. Cheers, Carolyn

  2. Peter Dowse - April 4, 2022 Reply

    Congrats to all the people who entered, simply getting a book to a point to enter it in a comp like this is a reward in and of itself.

    • Carolyn Martinez - April 4, 2022 Reply

      Hi Peter, Yes, you’re absolutely right! Writing a first draft of a manuscript is a massive achievement on its own. Cheers, Carolyn

  3. Julie Mouy - April 4, 2022 Reply

    Congratulations to the winners. I am working my way through Stephen King On Writing to improve my manuscript for this years Hawkeye Manuscript Application.

    • Carolyn Martinez - April 4, 2022 Reply

      Hi Julie, Agree – Stephen King’s On Writing is still an exceptional resource! One of the best books ever written on writing because not only does it give practical hands-on examples, his enthusiasm for and love of writing shines through and you can’t help but be motivated. One line that struck a chord with me was “I only write when I’m inspired. And I make sure I’m inspired at 9am every week day.” Best advice I ever received – straight out of Stephen King’s book. Cheers, Carolyn

  4. Lauren Daniels - April 6, 2022 Reply

    I am so thrilled! I saw the magic in Gabrielle Davis years ago when she attended my workshops. As her teacher then her editor, I saw clearly that she’s gifted and works hard. She takes direction so well. Congratulations Gabrielle! Reading of your result in the Hawkeye Prize made my day.

    • Carolyn Martinez - April 9, 2022 Reply

      Hi Lauren, This is great to know. Just as important to publishing houses as superior writing talent, we need to know that authors we sign will be a pleasure to work with and make our life more enjoyable, not harder. Selling books is challenging, and we do look for authors who have the right attitude to be successful. Thank you for taking the time to share your thoughts here – much appreciated! Kind regards, Carolyn

  5. Jo Skinner - April 7, 2022 Reply

    Congratulations to Mary, Bryn and Gabrielle on winning this great competition. An incredible and inspiring achievement. I really look forward to reading your novels sometime soon.
    Thank you, Carolyn, for the opportunity to enter a great comp like this. Having a deadline and meeting the submission criteria are such a sharp tools for editing and preparing a manuscript. I know I have learnt a tremendous amount not only about the craft of writing, but about myself. I look forward to honing my skills and entering again.

    • Carolyn Martinez - April 9, 2022 Reply

      Hi Jo, I’m so pleased to read your comments. This makes what we do in here worthwhile. Thank you for sharing your experiences, and for celebrating with the winners. I wish you all the best with your writing, and I’ll be in touch in the coming weeks with the judges’ comments on your entry. Kind regards, Carolyn

  6. Bridget Weller - May 24, 2022 Reply

    I very much appreciate you taking the time to provide feedback. “The prose is lovely”, that bit’s going in the proverbial pool-room!

  7. Juliet Wiseman - May 24, 2022 Reply

    Thanks for the helpful feedback on my manuscript. Something to work on.

  8. Stella Glorie - May 24, 2022 Reply

    This was so generous of you and Hawkeye to give feedback! Thank you

  9. Marian Matta - May 24, 2022 Reply

    Thank you very much, Carolyn, and please pass on my thanks to the editor who provided the feedback. It’s extremely helpful and has prompted me to revisit my manuscript with new eyes.

  10. Pearl - May 24, 2022 Reply

    Thank you for the feedback. It means a lot. The opinion was conveyed kindly and with acute observations. It’s considerate of Hawkeye Publishing to make the effort. I appreciate it.

  11. Lydia - May 24, 2022 Reply

    Hi Carolyn, Thanks so much for taking the time to send this feedback through. It’s very helpful and much appreciated 🙂

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